tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post7248466977449002137..comments2024-01-02T06:39:28.476-06:00Comments on erica and christy-two moms. two teachers. two writers. one blog.: Cliffhanger BLOGFEST (and a little snack on the side)erica and christyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13074820593371226159noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-88571425660919997202010-10-26T16:06:55.719-05:002010-10-26T16:06:55.719-05:00Oops! It was 500 words when I copied and pasted i...Oops! It was 500 words when I copied and pasted it from my manuscript! I've edited it six times since receiving all these great comments...and, uh, guess I forgot about the rules at that point! Sorry everyone!erica and christyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13074820593371226159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-7843042957724772202010-10-26T15:56:11.925-05:002010-10-26T15:56:11.925-05:00I too thought the premise was interesting. Your en...I too thought the premise was interesting. Your entry is longer than 500 words and I'm wondering if taking out some of the backstory would not only move your story along faster but also allow you to hit the word count. Just a suggestion.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-30038452539249041352010-10-26T09:25:39.012-05:002010-10-26T09:25:39.012-05:00Interesting premise. Definitely a cliffhanger. Lov...Interesting premise. Definitely a cliffhanger. Love the last line.J.C. Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01567971311643106302noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-28445348767015894252010-10-26T03:20:33.273-05:002010-10-26T03:20:33.273-05:00Hi,
Nice take on Viewpoint of aliens with Godlike...Hi,<br /><br />Nice take on Viewpoint of aliens with Godlike wishes: or not, as was the case with secondary character. Fun read, and good cliffhanger. ;)<br /><br />best<br />FFrancine Howarthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02326542867876257042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-27616592229236933852010-10-26T00:10:30.846-05:002010-10-26T00:10:30.846-05:00Exploding dirt!!! I enjoyed reading this, great cl...Exploding dirt!!! I enjoyed reading this, great cliffhanger :)<br /><br />RachRachael Harriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16764930101064527321noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-66254520449687797192010-10-25T23:01:52.896-05:002010-10-25T23:01:52.896-05:00Thanks for participating! We've judged your en...Thanks for participating! We've judged your entry. o/\o *high five*Brenda Drakehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01263237745979525170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-57059507997382749572010-10-25T20:26:58.879-05:002010-10-25T20:26:58.879-05:00Wow! Thank you all so much for the input. This i...Wow! Thank you all so much for the input. This is better than an online forum! I've edited some after reading your helpful advice. I'll keep working! Enjoy the rest of the cliffhangers. I have, and I'm not done yet. Off I go!erica and christyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13074820593371226159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-35489280948455716142010-10-25T20:10:08.180-05:002010-10-25T20:10:08.180-05:00Interesting story. Good cliffhanger. Just a couple...Interesting story. Good cliffhanger. Just a couple of points - The first line would have been better without you telling us it was going to be 'sinister' let what follows show us. Also I think 'Earthlings' is the term???<br /><br />Hope you don't mind the suggestions..:)Denise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-13850120713729771462010-10-25T18:06:32.984-05:002010-10-25T18:06:32.984-05:00The last actions are intriguing and the main chara...The last actions are intriguing and the main character seems to have a good story to tell. The large dialogue segments slow things down a little but but other than that, it's not bad. Good, and different, cliffhanger.Dawn Embershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00214560861614476799noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-26483036174037378642010-10-25T18:03:26.611-05:002010-10-25T18:03:26.611-05:00Very nice. Great imagery. I'd read on.Very nice. Great imagery. I'd read on.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07995267172282765794noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-86677446076844836252010-10-25T17:44:55.057-05:002010-10-25T17:44:55.057-05:00Interesting. I liked it. Good clffhanger.
One su...Interesting. I liked it. Good clffhanger. <br /><br />One suggestion and this come from reading a lot of YA novels. I think your larger chunks of dialogue and exposition could be broken up. Teens have a shortter attention span than most adults and even I (an adult) find myself skimming over big paragraphs to get to the small action ones.<br /><br />Thanks for the read.<br /><br />JJodi Henryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03216373059861459896noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-56191962638284870602010-10-25T16:43:58.374-05:002010-10-25T16:43:58.374-05:00christy, since I've only read the beginning of...christy, since I've only read the beginning of Solstice until now, boy, I want to read what's in the middle, too! and who can't want to read on when the mc is in a pillar of fire! umm, email me the rest ;)<br />ericaerica and christyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13074820593371226159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-38697917872190221472010-10-25T16:32:37.224-05:002010-10-25T16:32:37.224-05:00Interesting scene. Left us wondering.Interesting scene. Left us wondering.Wendy Tyler Ryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10841984342368861282noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-16813463858969459652010-10-25T16:29:29.159-05:002010-10-25T16:29:29.159-05:00Interesting and enjoyable. There's a bit too m...Interesting and enjoyable. There's a bit too much telling instead of showing, but I want to see more. Great cliffhanger.J E Fritzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03372746219262163566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-20241112546027560202010-10-25T13:44:40.886-05:002010-10-25T13:44:40.886-05:00Interesting premise. I have auras in my WIP, thoug...Interesting premise. I have auras in my WIP, though they're not mentioned in the scene I posted for this. Thanks for sharing.Jennifer Hoffinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07616744694563644199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-27374976715507736332010-10-25T13:31:39.853-05:002010-10-25T13:31:39.853-05:00Good scene! Creates lots of interesting questions...Good scene! Creates lots of interesting questions. Thanks!Nikkihttp://neyska.posterous.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-63201081014229543832010-10-25T12:47:21.680-05:002010-10-25T12:47:21.680-05:00Great read! :DGreat read! :DMariekehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16383960692054256957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-79019570327044689742010-10-25T11:10:40.972-05:002010-10-25T11:10:40.972-05:00Christy. Wow. Impressive. I want more ...Christy. Wow. Impressive. I want more ...Michael Di Gesuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17047267262428143113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-74796522465234719332010-10-25T11:07:48.778-05:002010-10-25T11:07:48.778-05:00Great dialogue here, and lots of interesting image...Great dialogue here, and lots of interesting imagery. It really makes me want to know more about the back story as well as turn to a new page! <br /><br />Good luck!Breehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16071207240841595421noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-67420181232266119792010-10-25T10:33:37.022-05:002010-10-25T10:33:37.022-05:00Nice read! Thanks for sharing.Nice read! Thanks for sharing.Shalleehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09907680428735740943noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-56903585509672197892010-10-25T07:01:11.242-05:002010-10-25T07:01:11.242-05:00This was a nice little read. It's a definite c...This was a nice little read. It's a definite cliff hanger that keeps me wanting more.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01677563505368503476noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3804696485095159380.post-31173949563745189842010-10-25T06:27:04.643-05:002010-10-25T06:27:04.643-05:00I saw you mentioned on Su's Cheekyness site an...I saw you mentioned on Su's Cheekyness site and thought I'd drop by and say hello. Nice to have met you both, I've enjoyed my visit.Felicity Grace Terryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17852843882007267665noreply@blogger.com