8.20.2010

Oh yes, I mean, Oh NO...not another ADVERB!

Adverbs...avoid them. Why? To SHOW and not tell. Let's practice. Why? I need to.

She ran quickly around the lake.
She sped around the lake. (See, the adverb was not really needed.)

She laughed loudly.
She guffawed.

(See...use a more specific verb. Word choice. Less repetition. Repetition is bad. It's why my manuscript was 116,000 words. When I'm pretty sure it would be better at 80,000.)

She shrugged apologetically.
Wanna help me with this one?

Lesson of today: revise and lose the adverbs.
TTFN

Dinner Menu for tonight: PIZZA NIGHT % of successfulness: TBD

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