The rules were so easy, it was basically: take a page (250 words) from your YA WIP that shows a romantic scene and post it today. So here's mine, from A New Day. Just before this page, Kenz finds out that she'll be home alone for a few days/nights. Things have gone from hot to heavy with Lincoln and she suddenly panics, worried he'll be disappointed once the "big moment" officially happens. She decides to have some girl-time with her best friend and in this scene, she's telling him he can't stay.
Page 137 (ish) of A New Day - erica's blogfest entry:
His look changed from playful to suspicious, but he got in the car and took me home without arguing. My feelings and actions were strange to me and impossible to explain to him. It wouldn't be fair not to at least try, so I invited him in.
Once inside, he grabbed me and pulled me close. I reached up and pushed my fingers through his wavy hair, trying to distract myself from how close our bodies were. His eyes blazed in what I guessed was a combination of understanding and frustration. I hoped he couldn't read my eyes or we'd end up in the bedroom after all. I pulled away a few inches just in case.
"Are you okay?" he asked as he bent his head down to look at my face. "You look upset about something."
"No, of course I'm not upset, I had a great time." I moved one hand down to his cheek and tried to make my face appear more confident.
"I'm not sure if I'll see you tomorrow. I made plans before I knew I'd be leaving so early tonight."
"That's good, Lincoln, I want you to spend time with your friends, too." Thankfully, he was smiling and seemed to believe my excuses. Everything but my voice ached to be with him.
"Have fun at your sleepover, but remember that I have very imaginative dreams," he suggested as the playful look returned.
"You are so not playing fair." I couldn't help myself and put my hands on his hips, returning the look. "I love you."
"Then stay."
"Not tonight." I opened to the door and led him out.
Very swoon worthy. :D
ReplyDeletehmmm.... niiiiiiceee.
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First of all, how did I not realize I wasn't following you back already?! My bad!
ReplyDeleteKenz, should be proud of herself. I don't even know Lincoln looks like (but I'm guessing he's unbelievably hot), but she showed way more willpower than I would have. It's really HARD to refuse a sexy boy you like when he gets playful!
Oooooh. Wow! Perfect!
ReplyDeleteVery nice!
ReplyDeleteStrep throat and ear infections? Ugh. I hope you all get well & stay well soon!
Oh, build me up and drop me! Great entry! Loved it. I must admit I was hoping she'd stay.
ReplyDeleteI'm so sorry your kids have been sick and that you got sick too! That's awful. Sending you healthy thoughts...
Hope you and your family are feeling better soon. Nothing worse than strep.
ReplyDeleteThis is a good scene- lots of muted tension. I certainly wonder what is going on with these folks!
Sorry you're feeling so aweful! Try to get some rest before disinfecting the house again.
ReplyDeleteNicely (Yes an adverb. Don't murder it!) written.
Michael
Very cute!
ReplyDeleteI hope you and yours feel better soon. Must be something going around. My entire house is sick except for me.
Awww! I wanted to know if she changed her mind and stayed...
ReplyDeleteOh such a tease!!! I want more!!! :)
ReplyDeleteThat was great, and I loved the line "everything but her voice ached to be with him." nice!
ReplyDeletesuch true teen emotions here -- it's not just reckless abandon that first time... there's all those insecurities wrapped up with the passion. you did a great job describing it all.
ReplyDeletehope you & ur little ones feel better soon.
Ooh, I have so many questions about what's going on between these two! Very well done... realistic and sweet. :)
ReplyDeleteLove that she'd not going through with it because she's insecure. GOOD GIRL. Sends a great message :D Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteYou guys are so sweet, you really know how to pump up a girl's ego!
ReplyDeleteThe antibiotics kicked in this afternoon and I tried to hit all the blogfest posts and comment (or at least emailed you back). Sorry if I missed anyone, let me know if I did!
Thanks again and have a great weekend (christy will be here tomorrow with the answers to yesterday's first line trivia!).
erica
I do love contemporary! Nice taste--I'd definitely like to know more.
ReplyDelete- Liz
I hope you feel better soon. I had strep for weeks before I even went to the doctor so I know how bad it can get.
ReplyDeleteGood entry for the blogfest. Not the typical, except for the first person part, so it was interesting to read though I almost missed the first paragraph. I like how the tone between them is in the very beginning and then it backs off because of decisions the characters make.
erica, i'm a late commenter, but i loved this excerpt. it is really well done. and, good girl, kenz!!!!
ReplyDeleteI like how you play with the scene and let us enjoy that play between the characters. Well done.
ReplyDeletehot stuff--everything but my voice... yessss! :D Great work, erica~ <3
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