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WE HAVE A COUPLE OF EVENTS TO KEEP YOU BUSY!
Brenda Drake's The Never-ending Scene/CLIFFHANGER Blogfest
October 25-26
Love suspense? Can't put down that page-turner? Well, then! Visit Brenda's blog and click on all those who signed up to partake in this blogfest! You'll get to read 53 cliffhangers that will leave you wanting more, more, more! (And, uh, you'll be left that way, cuz there are no actual pages to turn!) You get TWO DAYS to read these, so take your time! I mean, hurry...what are you waiting for! Go! Go! (WAIT!!! FINISH READING OUR BLOG POST FIRST, of course!)
oh, and by the way, mine is posted below. (scroll down a little ways)
YOU also NEED TO CLICK HERE! for a writeoncon LIVE-CHAT at 9:00 pm EST featuring the fabulous SARA MEGIBOW of NELSON LITERARY AGENCY, LLC! (note: sara was the first agent erica ever queried and her first partial request. yes, ultimately rejected, but erica credits sara for giving her the idea that she actually could do this writing thing - er, at least this querying thing!)
OUR REGULAR MONDAY MEALTIME MADNESS POST (we didn't forget!)
Pecan Snacks (or substitute almonds)
What you'll need:
1 egg white
1 tablespoon water
1 pound pecans
3/4 cup white sugar
1 teaspoon ground cinnamon
1 teaspoon salt
What to do with that stuff:
Preheat oven to 250 degrees F (120 degrees C).
In a large bowl, beat egg white with water until frothy. Stir in pecans and mix to coat.
Combine sugar, cinnamon and salt and stir into pecan mixture. Spread on a baking sheet.
Bake in preheated oven 1 hour, stirring every 15 minutes.
Enjoy while scrolling to keep up the live chat!
Store what's left in an airtight container.
NOW, while you munch, prepare to sit at the edge of your seat....
here's a never before
“They’ll never be able to get my father and aunt. No one will be able to convince the council anything was my fault. They’ll continue to search for you and Stana.”
“Child, they most likely have Stefen and Alexia in Themura at this moment.” Her thin lips spread across her face.
“That’s impossible." My mind tried to make sense of what she was saying. "My aunt is—." Trembling only made my singed skin hurt worse.
“Right over there?" She pointed a blue finger toward the outskirts of the forest that imprisoned me. "By your grandparents and mother?" She cackled. "Not anymore, Pumpkin."
She took a step toward me, then stopped. "Oh, don’t worry. No one will harm the rest of your family. Not today."
I drew my arms in closer to my chest. The rocks beneath my back seemed to grow sharper.
"Your aunt received a phone call from a Themuran council member only moments ago. She left to meet your dad, who gave his business partner a lame excuse for leaving him, yet again. Your father is soooo naïve. Poor man." She took another step and hovered above me.
She clucked her tongue. "He spent most of the past year trying to find the source of the evil that was tarnishing you all. He practically turned himself in, flying to Greece the way he did. Tattling again to the Council. So like his grandmother. The woman who started this whole mess."
Her mood seemed to change as the light in her eyes dimmed. I grew hopeful her insanity would be on my side. Leave me a chance. Then she leaned in, her voice an icy whisper.
“You see, your family will never learn to mind their own business. Yes, Stefen and Alexia were easily fooled. They’ll be transported to Themura any minute now where they'll pathetically try to defend their family name.”
She paused, glaring at me with deep blue eyes, a color no Earthian possessed. Her coppery auburn hair stuck out as though electrified by some unseen current.
Suddenly, her lips curled into a snarl. “You have all the power my daughter should possess. You’re a measly Transporter. Descended from the highest Greek council, yes, but that shouldn’t matter. My daughter has Themuran blood in her. She should be the one who can see auras and soak up the powers of those around her…not you. You aren’t even aware of how powerful you are.”
She spat at the ground. The dirt her saliva kicked up erupted into flames. "Enough talk. I can’t stand looking at you anymore.”
She’d made up her mind. There was nothing left to say. She leaped at me and snatched the bracelet and charm off my arm, scratching me with her long nails in the process. Her hands shot up into the air, coppery glitter pouring from them. The shards cascaded around me. She vanished and left me to disintegrate in the fiery pillars that grew up around me.
I saw you mentioned on Su's Cheekyness site and thought I'd drop by and say hello. Nice to have met you both, I've enjoyed my visit.
ReplyDeleteThis was a nice little read. It's a definite cliff hanger that keeps me wanting more.
ReplyDeleteNice read! Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteGreat dialogue here, and lots of interesting imagery. It really makes me want to know more about the back story as well as turn to a new page!
ReplyDeleteGood luck!
Christy. Wow. Impressive. I want more ...
ReplyDeleteGreat read! :D
ReplyDeleteGood scene! Creates lots of interesting questions. Thanks!
ReplyDeleteInteresting premise. I have auras in my WIP, though they're not mentioned in the scene I posted for this. Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteInteresting and enjoyable. There's a bit too much telling instead of showing, but I want to see more. Great cliffhanger.
ReplyDeleteInteresting scene. Left us wondering.
ReplyDeletechristy, since I've only read the beginning of Solstice until now, boy, I want to read what's in the middle, too! and who can't want to read on when the mc is in a pillar of fire! umm, email me the rest ;)
ReplyDeleteerica
Interesting. I liked it. Good clffhanger.
ReplyDeleteOne suggestion and this come from reading a lot of YA novels. I think your larger chunks of dialogue and exposition could be broken up. Teens have a shortter attention span than most adults and even I (an adult) find myself skimming over big paragraphs to get to the small action ones.
Thanks for the read.
J
Very nice. Great imagery. I'd read on.
ReplyDeleteThe last actions are intriguing and the main character seems to have a good story to tell. The large dialogue segments slow things down a little but but other than that, it's not bad. Good, and different, cliffhanger.
ReplyDeleteInteresting story. Good cliffhanger. Just a couple of points - The first line would have been better without you telling us it was going to be 'sinister' let what follows show us. Also I think 'Earthlings' is the term???
ReplyDeleteHope you don't mind the suggestions..:)
Wow! Thank you all so much for the input. This is better than an online forum! I've edited some after reading your helpful advice. I'll keep working! Enjoy the rest of the cliffhangers. I have, and I'm not done yet. Off I go!
ReplyDeleteThanks for participating! We've judged your entry. o/\o *high five*
ReplyDeleteExploding dirt!!! I enjoyed reading this, great cliffhanger :)
ReplyDeleteRach
Hi,
ReplyDeleteNice take on Viewpoint of aliens with Godlike wishes: or not, as was the case with secondary character. Fun read, and good cliffhanger. ;)
best
F
Interesting premise. Definitely a cliffhanger. Love the last line.
ReplyDeleteI too thought the premise was interesting. Your entry is longer than 500 words and I'm wondering if taking out some of the backstory would not only move your story along faster but also allow you to hit the word count. Just a suggestion.
ReplyDeleteOops! It was 500 words when I copied and pasted it from my manuscript! I've edited it six times since receiving all these great comments...and, uh, guess I forgot about the rules at that point! Sorry everyone!
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