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1)your own logline
3)your first page (any genre, only let us know what it is!)
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(because "lynnea" is not very good at cleaning out her email inbox...and it's atrocious in there, i tell you!)
(christy will post hers today and tomorrow, erica will post hers on friday and saturday)
throughout the four days we'll also add helpful links and info we've come across while researching loglines and/or anything pitch-related. cuz this blog's not just about us. we want to help you all out, too!
Via erica and Linda @ the Critique Sisters, I've used a couple of links to help me with my logline "formula".
Below is what I've come up with so far. I DON'T love any of them, so either vote for your favorite or show me another way to pitch the idea in a one sentence logline.
First, the links:
one of my all-time fave (former) blogging agents, nathan bransford's formula (quoted from his blog, click below to visit and find about 900ish more links on anything writing-related you need to know):
"The resulting very basic pitch is: When OPENING CONFLICT happens to CHARACTER(s), they have OVERCOME CONFLICT to COMPLETE QUEST. There are lots different ways of structuring these basic elements, but they should be there."
linda gray, one of the critique sisters, recenlty went to a writing conference and is passing her pitching knowledge along to the rest of us @ her blog (it's amazing, you should visit and follow). to see more of the fabulous advice and links she provides, click the quote below:
"...one sentence that describes the heart of your story. ...ask yourself what it is that truly drives the story. What is it the characters are compelled to do and why?...think in terms of what the private stakes are for the character (life, liberty, etc.), and what the public stakes are—what thing bigger than, or outside, the character created the possibility of this situation."
Second, *drumroll* my loglines: (some deleted/revised from wednesday's post)
a) A teenage girl, believed by inter-dimensional Transporters to be the subject of a prophecy, must prove her innocence by finding the cure for the epidemic she's accused of spreading.
b) Unless Dawn can stop the spread of an epidemic she’ll go down in history as the shadow-maker, the one who is prophesized to overtake the Earth and Themura dimensions.
c) A teenage artist’s sketches turn into landscapes from a secret dimension, one she learns her family has been hiding, and unless she can uncover the truth about herself, people she love will die while she stands accused.
d) An intuitive teenager realizes her gifts go beyond sensing lies and danger when she starts viewing auras and shadows around the people in her town, but she doesn't expect to be the one responsible for saving them all from an epidemic in order to keep from being accused of spreading it.