For details on how to get your (almost) free critique, please click here to visit christy's post - and comment on her loglines while you're there (because, well, that's how you get an almost free critique).
If you're wondering what other people think about loglines, you can also visit this link to Miss Snark's First Victim blog. The link will take you to her logline critique contest from last November -it could be helpful to you to find one you like and check the comments to see if anyone else agrees (or vice versa).
btw, a couple of months ago I (erica) let everyone know I had a full out with a publisher who was accepting unagented submissions. I haven't sent out many agent queries and actually have a pretty good track record of personalized rejections and partial requests (with a couple non-responders), but wanted to try this. I got the nicest rejection letter today. It even sounded like someone at least skimmed my book - said it had "an interesting story" and they "enjoyed the concept" but that in this tight market, they had other books in line that had stronger writing.
So, yes, another edit is in my future. Tightening. Strengthening. (etc.) It's never done, huh?? Since it's still in the Amazon contest, I'll also get two Amazon Vine Reviewers (usually readers, not necessarily writers) reviews of my excerpt on March 22nd - hopefully they're helpful to the process, even if I don't move on in the contest.
It does make me hopeful, though. I've got something. Plus, it's my first full-length novel, so like everything, experience should help. I'm going to pitch this one at the conference and then try to get my WIP done so I can do heavy edits, readers, etc. over summer break and start the querying process all over again...
So, if you're still with me, thanks. Here are my loglines for your review.
Seventeen-year-old Kenz Grayson never thought she'd spend her summer in a new town, let alone dodging a group of nasty girls, nursing her mom back to health after an accident, or learning to love, lose, and love (again) exactly the right guy for her, until she does it all.
Just when Kenz Grayson thinks the summer before her senior year will be a bust, she meets the guy who might change everything - if a car accident, an abuse allegation, and a horrible case of jitters don't make her ruin everything before she gets the chance to find out.
This is my first try at loglines. Hope you can help!!!